My Wand test

Wand Maker: Mr Ollivander

I was collecting all my things for my 1st year at Hogwarts, I Thought the most important thing I would need is a wand as I walked into the shop I heard the bell above the door ring and I was a little excited on the inside picking up my 1st wand.

I was looking around and couldn't see anyone and just as i was thinking to myself "where is Mr Ollivander?" He came out of the back of the shop, put on his glasses and looked down at me and I introduced myself as Tom Riddle and said I was looking for a wand to start my 1st year at Hogwarts.

Mr Ollivander went to the back and handed me a wand, I just looked at it and he said to me "well give it a wave" at which point all the vases and other breakable china on the desk shattered at which point I gave the wand back to him.


Mr Ollivander Gave me a second wand which he thought would serve me quite well but when I gave it a wave all the chest of drawers he bad behind the front desk started to open and everything went everywhere which startled me a bit and put the wand on the desk very quickly.

Mr Ollivander Came back out with another wand and said to me that this is a new unique wand which no one has. which has a phoenix Tail Feather inside and was all black, As soon as I waved it, It became warm and the tip of the wand started to light up.

I was very happy to get such a unique wand which no one else owned and before I left Mr Ollivander said to me, "I have a feeling you are going to do Great Things with this wand" and I opened the door and walked out of the shop. Ready to get the rest of my school supplies.

Splendid, Tom, 40 points to hufflepuff!

-Head Master

What would i have needed to got 50 points?

Tom, dont you think this has a very close resemblance to the Original Works of J K Rowling? And you could have described the shop, the appearance of Ollivander and else!

-Head Master

excellent, tom.but as the head master said you should have been a bit more descriptive